Welcome to my home.This is my studyis great.This mom''s bedroomis beautiful.Look! the toy car is in the living room.This is the dath room.I take a shower is here.This is the kitchen.I like my home.名师点评：小作者在文中介绍了自己的家，my study，mom''s bedroom，The toy car the (b)athroom. kitchen等等，有条理顺序，除了极个别语法错误，写得很不错哦，在英语的写作中，记得两个单词间一定要有距离哦，如果以后在写英语作文时添加一些自己的感情在里边，相信会更好。下面是修改后的作文，小括号里是改错或新添加的内容。Welcome to my home. This is my study (it) is great.（I study here after school.） This (is my )mom''s bedroom (it) is (very) beautiful. Look! The toy car is in the living room.(I like it very much ). This is the (b)athroom. I (often)take a shower （去掉is here添加in it）. This is the kitchen. My mother cooks the meals for me.I like my home.